Talk:Jyu Viole Grace/@comment-184.66.6.56-20110531063508

The plot 'summery' needs to be shortened. We don't need to hear the entire story, that's what the chapter summaries and the actual comic are for. They would probably be faster to read too. Lets try to simplify it to key points. For example the first floor test can be reduced to a few sentences

After arriving at the first floor, the first floor Guardian and tester Headon gives him an unusually difficult test. Soon rankers Yuri and Evan arrive, and Yuri criticizes Headons' for being unfair. Evan gives Baam an A-rank pocket, and Headon allows Yuri to lend him the sentient top ranked needle "Black March". Baam manages to convince the Black March to ignite and passes the test to be teleported to the second floor.

It could done better but you see the point. This isn't the place to know what a pocket can do, the specifics of how he passed the first floor test; all we need to know is that he faced an unusually cruel test, got a bunch of cool stuff, and pwned.